Эссе - проверка и критика

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Cruelty showed on TV and in the movies can be a trigger of a crime rising in socium. People who like such genre of movies maybe potential criminals.This essay will discuss if the watching of the above-mentioned genre can make people become the criminals.

Watching the movies where violence can be demonstrated in most might be a cause of why some people become a criminal. This can be happened because of people’s emotional status or if a human has some mental diseases which only empower his intention in making crime after watching a movie where the violence prevailed. For instance, our neighbour had a mental disorder and one day he made a murder on the street. Killed an innocent pedestrian. After the investigation, it was revealed that the movie which he had seen before, created an intention in him to commit the murder.

On the other hand, I can’t disagree with the statement that a lot of people will become a criminal if they like to watch movies where violence was demonstrated. The reason of that is because the vast majority of people have a stable psychology and seeing how people kill each other in a movie couldn’t affect them.

For instance, my brother is watching different films where violence can be met very often and he is a normal person who doesn’t have an intention to implement what he saw in such kind of films in life.

So, people who watch a lot of films where cruelty prevailed are potential criminals. I don’t disagree with that point unless people haven’t got a stable psychology, clear mind and they are suffering from mental diseases.

 

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