Тема в разделе "PTE", создана пользователем Aykhan, 26 май 2018.
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These days people prefer to live in high rise apartments. Given a choice, would you choose to live in a high rise?
These days people prefer to live in high rise apartments citing a better quality of life in a high rise apartment. Do you think high rise apartments lead to better living conditions?
The question that dwelling in skyscrapers leads to better living conditions requires serious consideration. While it is possible to claim that quality of life does not depend on which storey people live, in my opinion, it can have a significant impact on quality of life. In the following paragraphs, I will further explain my point of view with suitable examples and arguments.
There are several reasons why I agree that living in high rise apartment is much better for a lot of people. The most important one is gas emissions which produces by the vehicles cannot reach the high floors of a building and, as a result, habitats can lead a more healthy life in comparison with those, who live in down floors. In my own experience, as I am living on the eleventh floor, I feel how the air in that level more pure than in lower levels of the building.
Furthermore, being an habitant of the skyscraper is also about attractive view. In this context, dwellers of higher floors have a luck to enjoy an amazing scene of the city, which they can contemplate from their balconies. For instance, they can see the magnificent sunrise in the mornings.
In conclusion, I would reiterate that living on the high floors can give to their dwellers a lot of advantages and that is why I strongly disagree with the misguided belief that high rise apartments cannot be beneficial for the people.
“Self-motivation and self-practice can help one to achieve success on anything and classroom training is not always required”. What is your view on this statement?
The notion that self-practice can substitute classroom training requires serious consideration. While it is understandable why some would oppose that, I strongly agree with this notion. In the following paragraphs, I will further explain my point of view with suitable examples and arguments.
There are several reasons why I agree that traditional study does not always required if a person is able to practice by himself in order to reach his aims and achieve success in any field. The most important one is self-motivation. Intrinsic beliefs of people make them stronger and they can learn a lot of things, which ordinary people could not.
Second of all, though academic training helps to understand basic principles and practices, it limits students to think out of the box. Conversely, self-study helps to learn many things and opens door to imagination and creativity. For example, though Thomas Alva Edison was a school dropout, he invented the electric bulb by dint of strong perseverance and consistent practice.
In conclusion, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that self-motivation and self-practice are essential to achieve success in education. When coupled with classroom training, these can take students to astronomical heights of success.
196 слов это недостаточно. Даже если будет 199, а не 200, то снимут баллов 15. Так же и больше 300 писать не надо по той же причине.
Это один из примеров уровня как я писала, всегда было больше 80 кроме одного раза 77. В этом эссе возможно лучше бы было использовать больше синонимов. Ну и предложения сложнее по структуре.
What was the most important invention of the last 100 years?
Over the recent years, the question of what is the most important invention for the last 100 years has become extremely popular, and related topics are frequently discussed. I strongly believe that the most meaningful invention of our time is computers.
It is certainly true to say that computers have brought a number of benefits to our life. Computing obviously boosted the development of many areas of science and technology. For example, development of computer technology allowed development of many other areas such as communication technology and the Internet, scientific research and deep space exploration. Not only industrial technology has developed, but also ordinary people received the opportunity to study online, connect with each other and entertain themselves with computers.
Furthermore, since the appearance of personal computers, a possibility of self-education has risen. It is evident, that even people with limited finances may get free information online via computers. For instance, there are plenty of free videos that teach us skills and give us necessary knowledge. In addition to this, personal computers play important role in the social life of modern society by connecting people around the world via social networks.
In conclusion, I believe that the most important invention of the last century is computers that allowed development of all areas of life - from industrial advancement to personal development of people.
Спасибо за ответ, не знаю как у Вас получается написать что-то за 12 минут, у меня дома минимум пол часа уходит (при том что печатаю довольно быстро) и потом проверка минут 5. слишком глобально мыслю, и эссе вечно к 300 слов подходят...
Grammar - 73
Oral Fluency - 81
Pronunciation - 90
Spelling - 20 (не знаю почему так мало, вроде не совсем уж безграмотная, но вроде видео смотрела где-то, что с марта 2018, программа считает количество удалений backspace, мол мышкой надо выделять и писать поверх, чтобы ее обмануть.)
Vocabulary - 78
Written Discourse - 56 (параграфы не отделяла строкой, теперь буду)
Да, точно. Забыл после того как grammarly удалил некоторые предлоги и артикли, добавить или перефразировать предложения.
Спасибо, отличное эссе, буду пробовать тоже писать по структуре.
Я вот тоже решилась показать свою писанину...
Paper books are and will always be superior to e-books.
Discuss the advantages or disadvantages of e-books with regards to this statement. Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.
Reading was always one of the activities that people prefer to do during their leisure time. Presently, in the century of new technology, paper books have been almost replaced by e-books. While one may argue that paper books are better that electronic books, I believe that benefits of e-books outweigh its drawbacks. In the following paragraphs, I will support my point of view with suitable arguments and examples.
The first advantage is that it is very convenient to read an e-book. It is not heavy, so you can take it wherever you want and read it anywhere; in addition, it is easy to download many stories into it, so you can have a library in one book. In contrast, paper books are heavy, and when you, for example, go to a vacation, you need to put one or several heavy books into your luggage and this is not convenient.
Moreover, e-books are better than paper books, as they do not need trees for their production. Presently, thousands of treas are logged to produce paper, which is a main material to produce a paper book. In contrast, there can be hundreds of books in one e-book, so when people opt to read it, they save thousands of trees on our planet, which are vital for global environment and fresh air. In short, e-books help to keep trees and fresh air on our planet, which becomes more and more important, presently.
To summarize, even though paper books were superior in the past, I believe that e-books are advantageous over paper books, and in time, paper books will disappear, as people need trees to have fresh air, and it is more convenient to use e-book than paper book.
Are better than
Можете написать не better, а eco-friendly. Больше подойдёт.
Presently, thousands of trees
Старайтесь часто не употреблять одни и теже слова, тут к примеру, presently. Можете,конечно, употреблять, но в разных параграфах, а не через каждые 2 предложения
В целом, идеи неплохи, особенно, если учесть, что проверяет машина. Но лучше б разнообразить словарный запас и надо спеллингом поработать, если конечно, то что вы писали не было опечатком просто.
Спасибо, учту замечания. Да это были опечатки, но я их не вижу, не могу вылавливать никак свои мелкие ошибки
Та же проблема у меня, проверяю и вроде бы всё отлично, ставлю в хром переводчик, включаю граммарли и он дофига находит. Оосбенно в артиклях. Хотя стараюсь предельно внимательно их ставить или не ставить,где не надо.
проверьте колокейшн к слову replaced
так же в глаза бросается везде e-books - нужны синонимы, например digital texts, electronic versions of traditional paper-based literature
то что вы имеете ввиду под trees logging это green technology, что популярная тема, нужно по ней вокэбьюлари разнообразить
и так же как с и-букс идет повторение tree много раз
надо как-то выкручиваться и заменять синонимами
в идеале бы не рисковать и больше двух раз одно и то же слово не повторять за весь текст
вместо presently Пожалуйста, войдите, чтобы видеть содержимое
именно для того, чтобы почистить спеллинг нужно быстро писать и 5 минут оставлять на проверку
нам на курсах рекомендовали как-нибудь шопотом читать, типо так больше ошибок видно
Спасибо большое за замечания. буду стараться улучшаться. Но никак не могу начать быстро писать, долго очень думаю над идеями и интродакшеном, иногда до 10 минут получатся а целое ессе не менее 30 минут...
The competitive environment in school and university promotes excellence. Do you agree or disagree with this notion?
The notion that competitive atmosphere in educational centres can be a cause of excellence requires serious consideration. While it is understandable why some would oppose this, I strongly agree with this notion. In the following paragraphs, I will further explain my point of view with suitable examples and arguments.
There are several reasons why I agree that environment, in which, those who acquiring knowledge can compete with each other, make them excellent students. The most important one is creativeness and intention to achieve goals. Students will try to achieve their goals and in order to do that, they will assume others as contenders. In my own experience, I have seen how my group mates have had an intention to achieve their goals and this fact has made me more goal oriented.
Furthermore, promoting excellence is also about human resources in country and society. In this context, a more competitive fraternal society often has more diligent and disciplined people. This fact in its turn can be a cause of country flourishing. For instance, according to international statistics, the Netherlands have an excellent economy and prosperity, because citizens of the country are hardworking.
In conclusion, I would reiterate that the competitive environment is necessary in education and that is why I strongly disagree with the misguided belief that contest elements in education cannot be a trigger of excellence.
Xenophobia has accelerated rapidly in the western countries. According to you, what are the reasons and what can be done by the governments and individuals to solve this problem?
The problem of xenophobia has assumed a massive proportion now. Though, this problem seems insurmountable it is, in fact, possible to eradicate it with the help of some creative solutions. In the following paragraphs, I will further discuss the problems, causes and solutions in more detail.
The most severe repercussion of xenophobia is that, according to locals, immigrants should not be entitled to all the benefits, such as healthcare, employment to which natives have access to. As a result, they suffer from inapplicable conditions of living in a foreign country. Furthermore, intolerance towards different cultures is another consequence of this issue. For instance, some natives do not want to see elements of the Indian culture in their country.
Despite the serious nature of the problem, it can still be tackled if governments take some responsibility and involve themselves in solving the issue. First and foremost, they have to make amendments in law in order to control the problem from spreading further. It should be combined with the wishes of people to ensure an enduring solution is attained. As an example, they can orchestrate voting, where natives can express their opinion towards immigrants.
In conclusion, I would reiterate xenophobia is a problem that needs to be dealt with urgently and measures, such as those discussed in the essay, can greatly solve the problem.
У вас предложения тяжелые как камни, очень трудно читать поскольку все запутано, усложнено запятыми и словами, которые никто никогда не употребляет.
Тут нужно почитать статьи в околонаучных журналах и взять на заметку как они пишут, какие обороты употребляют и слова. В эту сторону нужно делать усилия, в сторону лаконичности, а не просто пару лопат запятых и пару лопат слов позабористее и типа все будет окей.
Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinking them while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar consumption.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Write between 200 and 300 words.
Obesity is one of the main problems of modern society and consuming sugary drinks is one of the main causes of it. There are people who believe that education would solve the issue, but I believe that it will not be enough, as it is hard to control it, and taxation would be a better way to decrease sugar consumption. The following paragraphs of this essay will support my point of view with relevant arguments and examples.
Presently, sugar is almost everywhere, especially in various drinks, like soda, cola, Pepsi and other. The main consumers of those drinks are children and it seems possible, for some opponents, to stop them from drinking sweet beverage via education. However, who would control it? For example, a child received a lesson at school where he was told that it is very dangerous to drink sweet products, but after a lesson he is tired and goes to a canteen and the first things he sees there are many different drinks, which he remembers are very tasty, as a result, he would forget about the lesson he has just heard and buy a drink.
On the other hand, taxation would have several elements of control. Firstly, it is possible to make a tax that high, that it would become unprofitable for companies who produce sweet drinks, where profit is the main element they care about, they do not care about children's health. Secondly, the high tax would lead to beverages price increase, as a result, parents may restrict children from buying sweet drinks as it would become too expensive, parents would control children. They would do what education is not able to do.
In conclusion, although there are some positive aspects of education, that may stop children from consuming sweet drinks and decrease the risk of obesity, I believe it will not help, as no one would control it. In my opinion, taxation is much better.
получилось очень длинное и не уложилась во время, прям не знаю как с этим бороться
Для IELTS согласен, что предложения неправильные. Но для PTE (эта тема) все равно, компьютер не убавит.
Я, конечно, понимаю, что имеется ввиду, но не думаю, что в околонаучных журналах слова полегче или те,что употребляются часто. Там тоже слова академического уровня, чаще всего.
А в целом, думаю у компа не появятся чувства после такого эссе и он не станет судить плохо Главное,что баллы не убавят, как убавили бы в IELTS.
It is said that the most important factor in developing a sense of mental wellbeing was parents’ care and assurance given to their children. But some people are of the view that this can restrict the child’s autonomy and prevent them from developing a strong self-identity. What is your opinion?
The question that parents’ care play an important role in the development of their child’s mental wellbeing requires serious consideration. While it is possible to claim that parents’ help can alleviate the life of their children, in my opinion, it can create constraints in developing of child’s self-identity. In the following paragraphs, I will further explain my point of view with suitable examples and arguments.
There are several reasons why I agree that parents’ excessive care can create the certain problems in the children’s future. The most important one is those who have nurtured in the above-mentioned conditions could not be independent when they become adults. As a result, they will not be able to tackle their problems by themselves. In my own experience, our neighbour, whose age is above thirty, still come to have an advice from his parents.
Furthermore, this attitude towards the child can provoke the problems in personal life in the adolescence period. In this context, a teenager will not be able to create a close relationship with the representatives of the opposite gender. The parents will always want to control their child, even in the above-mentioned cases. For instance, one of my group mates still living with parents, because he could not establish a relationship with anyone else, as his parents control his relations with anyone.
In conclusion, I would reiterate that parents’ overcare sometimes could break the life of their child and that is why I strongly disagree with the misguided belief that mental wellbeing of the child totally depends on parents.
For instance, one of my group mates is still living with parents,...
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